I would like to thank the following people for critiquing my entire novel: Juliette, Eric, Brian, Sami, Nicole, Becca, Phil, Jenny, and Katie. Also, thank you to everyone who critiqued individual chapters.
Here is a list of criticism that I got from these critiques:
There needs to be smoother transitions between scenes
Connect the stories earlier
Too many genres in one book
Consider switching POV from Sara-Jayne to Promisus
Pacing slogs toward the middle
Pacing of the end is too fast, snowballs
Ending is anti-climactic, want to know what happens next
Add religious side to Wintry and Truick to add conflict
Too much crazy stuff during the apocalypse
Too much thought/explanation in intense times
Need more back story
Need goals and motives of characters
Need closer POV
Why does SJ kill herself?
Janek finds the riff too easily
Romance between Wintry and Leonard is too brief to care
Chapter breaks are odd
Need more description of Heaven and Hell
Need recaps at the start of each chapter
Too much dialogue in some parts
Cancer element is no longer relevant half way through
Center on one theme
Define "riff"
Skips over some important scenes
Janek's initiation scene is out of character
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